one of my poem. please comment.
Her first sight, first glance; was like a shock.
And I was still there, as statue, like a rock
The spiritual days with her, were much pleasant
Her accord was there; in thoughts, little bit talk
Her series of memories has a long chain
And I can recall them with any place of clock
But time has gone, like waves of shores
And I downstairs from past, with desperate walk
Today, there is no gay, even in a milky way
Thinking with grief; is it true, or was it mock?
One of my poem. Please comment.
Look inside my heart,
And you will find a secret place
Reserved for you,
And you alone
Look inside my soul,
And you’ll find profundity
My love is washing in waves
Over every moment of our sharing
Look inside my thoughts
And you’ll see silver stars
Dancing upon our names
Written with a golden chain
Look inside my life
And you’ll know
That love has attached with our names
But you don’t know
And I don’t want to show